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地不符合吹風(fēng)機哭從頭

作者缺少對主角的刻畫，這小說看起來就好像是紀(jì)實體的科普書，歷史書一樣，從第三人稱解說 也不過多將墨筆放在主角身上，說實話我看著有點腎疼……

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十天一把魔劍我殺了惡龍（十個字）

作者大大請問有女主嗎

我跟我女朋友講了，她說她也要看，所以你快點的吧。懂？

快更新啊，這是我的精神食物啊

這開頭很吸引人，愛了愛了

可以將教會的口頭號，寫為，生與死輪回不止，這是我看過的另外一篇神靈系的，只不過太監(jiān)了，

死神用自己的能力還會扣除自己的壽命？

倉皇而逃，主角是圣人君子嗎？這么純？哪怕你用個不好意思都比這個好百倍

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情節(jié)什么的很好，就是一些細(xì)節(jié)描寫不太好，現(xiàn)在盡快熟悉情節(jié)的把握，然后慢慢來寫細(xì)節(jié)吧，反正沒啥人氣，這本說你當(dāng)練筆都沒事，當(dāng)然前提是你有兼職

最近被反派無腦環(huán)繞，看看這種類型的書也是挺不錯的，文筆不錯！
鎮(zhèn)樓！

女大三，抱金磚。女大三十，送江山。女大三百，送仙丹。女大三千，位列仙班。女大三萬，王母喂飯。女大三十萬，佛祖門前站。女大三百萬，仙界你說了算。女大三千萬，六界任你轉(zhuǎn)。女大三個億，盤古是你弟。

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我從沒見過這本書，真當(dāng)妙筆連珠

作者加油，你可以的。沖沖沖！

很好看，不是互抄，加油加油加油